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    JakeJake
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    My first landscape in 20 years. Feedback welcome. I can see my brush strokes lack conviction, my brushes were variably loaded so there are different weights of paint, and I need to tighten the little bridge and posts on the pontoon, which I will do once the paint has firmed a little. I also muddied the colours in the centre a bit. I am on the fence about the yellow ochre in the left hand corner, while it was true the light was different in the photo, I think it is inconsistent with the rest of the painting, I’ll add some permanent orange into that to bring it more into balance I think. Any other suggestions and feedback appreciated.  It was a 4 hour painting, working initially from a photo and then putting that away to focus on what was in front of me.

     

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    Romel MadrayRomel Madray
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    I am not an expert, but recently been studying composition but please take it as someone who is not an expert and in no means ill willed, I am just looking based on my efforts, so if I am incorrect it i not meant to be harsh.And so said feedback is welcomed.

    1. The dark area on the left needs some clarification that it is a form, it is flat
    2. The water needs some gradation to show less light as coming from the land
    3. The focal point needs some defination of the form.
    4. Lines wise the focal points point out of the painting
    5. Some leaves on the tree and emphasis of the mountains in the background
    6. Also is it a noon or sunset. The colors of the rocks make me make feel that it is sunset but the bright light suggests noon.
    7. There is a clear almost abrupt value change in the water but not seeing the sun as the clouds are very yellow.

    Regards

    #1811813
    JakeJake
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    Thanks Romel, that’s great.  I’ll be tightening it up this week so will build these in.  Here’s the photo I took last month I used to work from. 

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    Carlos Perez
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    Hey jake i like that sunset mann and the values are working accordingly to the image as well.

    However acknowledging your clear initial intention would help us giving you better feedback, I’d suggest Deciding the map of our image before picking a brush by replying to questions such as what do I want to convey out of this painting? is it a color study? is it a value study? is it a study of water or rather a focus on the sunlight? or as you mentioned it’s focus on the brushstrokes? and only working on that intention so that we can all give feedback on it.

    There’s a   great course with bill Perkins on composition where he goes in deep about it. Super recommended.

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