I’m always impressed when artists can use bold outlines without it feeling heavy or oppressive – like Cezanne. My attempts always render the form flat and lifeless, but you’ve managed to keep the gesture and the liveliness of the model. I think the foreshortening of the arms and hands is very well done, achieving a lot with line/shape alone. The bend of the shoulders reads convincingly and the turn of the head is almost cinematic, like an old film, you’ve captured the expressive pose really well.
Only two points I might mention are (1) proportions – the lower half of the figure seems too short or the torso too long? It might be that she’s crouched, but the foreshortening of the legs isn’t reading? The left leg is clearly bent but the left hip is higher than the right hip, but the right leg looks straight? Maybe there’s a bit too much length around the hips? Unsure. (2) half-tones – on the one hand, the bold shadowing creates a really dramatic pose, it suits the gesture, but on the other hand it might be appealing to introduce more half-tones to blur the edges to guide the viewer away from some areas, leaving contrast elsewhere to aim the gaze at specific points. The strong shadow/light separation might be what’s making the hard outline work though.
A lovely drawing, keep it up!
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